war
it ain't so far
looking at u like a lion to dear
standing in the field far away
not moving his eyes from the prey
where is he ,u never know
in your mind its always there as foe
man built bombs and gun
playing with it was never fun
with them comes horror and pain
taking lives again and again
human kills human just to stay alive
making you think whats wrong and whats right
coz you wanna take a stand and dive
may be its wrong, may be its right
or may be theres no right or wrong
its the quest for power, the quest for strength
to be the one, above them all
the war was never started
the war will never end
coz the war is always on...
Wednesday, July 4, 2007
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Honestly, I think this one is far better than 'the story'...but its just my opinion(and its also the ultimate truth...the bottom line..the whatever...cos its said by 'urs truly'...heehee...in short..its a FACT...I hope am not confusing u).
Now talking about 'the story'......
Believe me anyone can write a melancholic poem...about the struggles...the agony...the apathy..the sorrow...the distress...the BLAH...n u did too(which proves u are just a mere mortal..UNLIKE MOI...heehee)n the thing is,tht u dont even have to be bitter or sad to write a "SAD" poem...but this one bout the war thingy...i still cant believe that, u wrote it (heehee)...but twas VERY good.....what else...what else..yeah...try staying with the rhyme..once u have started of with it..it shudnt suddenly become a free verse (that was positive criticism...dont crib about it much...the poem was AWSUM anyways....)
thats it i guess.....cya 'on the job' tomorrow...
bye.........cheers...PEACE!!!
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